Hmm, I played the same game and although there may have been some minor errors with wording, it all still flowed. But then again I am not a grader on English 101. As for the comment on being too short, that is insane! How long does someone want for a free adult VN? Which leads to the next cray comment regarding H scenes not being many or long enough. All I can say is maybe the developer modified in the last seven to nine days, oops, nope, same game for the last ten days lol. Nice flowing story Raybae. Not sure if this is your first release but your on the right track. Good luck.
I do not know how to say this without it sounding rude, but it's not my intention honestly! This game really needs a proofreader. I'm not sure if you are actually aware of this. Check your script out, and you will notice very often there are missing words in sentences, and also wrong words to describe stuff.
It can be very difficult at times to even read some of the things the characters are saying due to a combination of things, which could be very quickly fixed just by adding the missing words and correcting sentences using the right syntax. I really like this game very much, and I am willing to proofread for you, for free.
If there is someone already proofreading for you, then they are doing a terrible job, sorry.
Hi, I just tried to contact you via pm on your discord channel, but i cant send it because it says you need to be friends for me to message you. I am using the same name there as I am here.
ive tried contacting you, but its been impossible even over on your discord channel. i have corrected a couple of the chapters, but i have decided to stall on the remaining few chapters, until i can contact you privately and send these chapters back to you. after which i will quickly work and complete the remaining chapters. I will also need to work on the update before you release, to make it consistent throughout..as mentioned previously.
Question for the developer: (spoiler alert) If you don't decide to kiss Carol on day 17 will there be another chance to "romance" (I guess would be the right word) her without any consequences?
I like this game, plain and simple. Still a bit rough around the edges, but that's to be expected from games in development. The story is engaging, the characters are varied and relatable, the sex scenes are on point, and the pacing is prime.
I love Maria's content, but the Yumi stuff is kinda off putting. The BM theme is something I really don't enjoy and I'll be staying away from any kind of domination route completely. The secretary is cutely done too.
You just gotta work on the spelling/grammar/wrong character speaking issues and it'll be great
noticed quite a few spelling mistakes, and as someone else noted below in their posts, there is definitely some work to do with, which what each character is saying, for example, he and she often tend to get mixed up in coversations, and sometimes, a conversation line is given to the wrong person. for an example, maria might say something, that the MC should say, and there are other little examples littered throughout.
Really loving the plot lines, especially with maria, her sister and of course laura and jameela..wonder if jameela gets brave enough. I am also wondering if and when the FFFM scenese occur at a later point, that they should actually be quite long scenes. Dont get me wrong, really loving your work, but the scenes really need to be extended with more kinky options with the girls. in fact apart from the lactation, i haven't really seen anything in this avn yet that i would consider a kink..would love to have ALL the women in a big orgy with only the main character, with long long scenes, that would be hot as hell...but like i said this is easily one of the better avn's ive seen so far. keep up the great work and please consider what iv'e said above, especially a massive orgy with just the main character! thanks
loved this game, I cant wait for more updates. I hope I can convince Alex to get freaky some day lol. I really liked the Maria plot aswell. The story is seriously amazing so far. good job!
I did like this game and will drop a follow. However I do have to say that it could use some work, for some reason I got stuck a few time early on because the dialogues started going backwards.
Then ofc there's the classic ones where it's obvious that a line is meant for someone else than the one who's saying it, or where it should say she it says he instead.
Stuff like that is ofc nothing serious. But the weird thing where conversations are going backwards are a bit annoying since it's making it a bit tough to go on. But as said, I'm dropping a follow for this game and I'm looking forward to the upcoming updates.
Thanks for playing. Can you be a bit more specific about where you faced these issues? Specially the one about dialogue going backwards? That would be a great help.
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Hmm, I played the same game and although there may have been some minor errors with wording, it all still flowed. But then again I am not a grader on English 101. As for the comment on being too short, that is insane! How long does someone want for a free adult VN? Which leads to the next cray comment regarding H scenes not being many or long enough. All I can say is maybe the developer modified in the last seven to nine days, oops, nope, same game for the last ten days lol. Nice flowing story Raybae. Not sure if this is your first release but your on the right track. Good luck.
i played this game
not sure if there are some alternative endings or choices affect anything besides "how much of the game you will see"
game is pretty okey, its free, support for android, some choices, kind normal and likeable characters (at least for this genre)
game feels kind of short
sex scenes are rather basic, offer some position/view changes
i like renpy sandbox games more, but at least you don't have to wonder whre you must tap to progress or what are you missing
i would say give it a shot, i can see solid work there and hope for more
it's still in early development.
Can you tell me which one is for newer android devices?
I do not know how to say this without it sounding rude, but it's not my intention honestly! This game really needs a proofreader. I'm not sure if you are actually aware of this. Check your script out, and you will notice very often there are missing words in sentences, and also wrong words to describe stuff.
It can be very difficult at times to even read some of the things the characters are saying due to a combination of things, which could be very quickly fixed just by adding the missing words and correcting sentences using the right syntax. I really like this game very much, and I am willing to proofread for you, for free.
If there is someone already proofreading for you, then they are doing a terrible job, sorry.
Hello sycopter, I would be very happy to get some help with proofreading the game. Can you join the discord server, and send me message there?
https://discord.gg/wuHPWmfjWf
Hi, I just tried to contact you via pm on your discord channel, but i cant send it because it says you need to be friends for me to message you. I am using the same name there as I am here.
ive tried contacting you, but its been impossible even over on your discord channel. i have corrected a couple of the chapters, but i have decided to stall on the remaining few chapters, until i can contact you privately and send these chapters back to you. after which i will quickly work and complete the remaining chapters. I will also need to work on the update before you release, to make it consistent throughout..as mentioned previously.
I have replied to you on discord days ago. Check your dm
i havent recieved any dm from you?
v0.5 downloads are now added! Enjoy everyone!
when is the next update`?
Peeking at the patreon headlines makes it look like by end of month.
thanks, let's hope so, really enjoyed the game so far!
From a public post in the patreon
"Maids and Maidens v0.5 will be released in following dates:
Tier 3 — August 29
Tier 2 — September 2 (Along with the official guide)
Tier 1 — September 5
Public — September 6
Thank you to everyone for your patience, and continuous support."
thanks!
do you know whene the update is coming? :)
Question for the developer: (spoiler alert) If you don't decide to kiss Carol on day 17 will there be another chance to "romance" (I guess would be the right word) her without any consequences?
Yes, there will be another route with Carol
I see, thank you for responding, knowing this makes me even more excited for updates!
As others have said, good start to the story, but needs work on the language, a proofreader or something.
No discord?
I am keeping the discord Patrons only for now. But I have plans to open it in future
I like this game, plain and simple. Still a bit rough around the edges, but that's to be expected from games in development. The story is engaging, the characters are varied and relatable, the sex scenes are on point, and the pacing is prime.
I love Maria's content, but the Yumi stuff is kinda off putting. The BM theme is something I really don't enjoy and I'll be staying away from any kind of domination route completely. The secretary is cutely done too.
You just gotta work on the spelling/grammar/wrong character speaking issues and it'll be great
noticed quite a few spelling mistakes, and as someone else noted below in their posts, there is definitely some work to do with, which what each character is saying, for example, he and she often tend to get mixed up in coversations, and sometimes, a conversation line is given to the wrong person. for an example, maria might say something, that the MC should say, and there are other little examples littered throughout.
Really loving the plot lines, especially with maria, her sister and of course laura and jameela..wonder if jameela gets brave enough. I am also wondering if and when the FFFM scenese occur at a later point, that they should actually be quite long scenes. Dont get me wrong, really loving your work, but the scenes really need to be extended with more kinky options with the girls. in fact apart from the lactation, i haven't really seen anything in this avn yet that i would consider a kink..would love to have ALL the women in a big orgy with only the main character, with long long scenes, that would be hot as hell...but like i said this is easily one of the better avn's ive seen so far. keep up the great work and please consider what iv'e said above, especially a massive orgy with just the main character! thanks
Great game and loving it, keep up the great work and can't wait for more updates.
loved this game, I cant wait for more updates. I hope I can convince Alex to get freaky some day lol. I really liked the Maria plot aswell. The story is seriously amazing so far. good job!
I did like this game and will drop a follow. However I do have to say that it could use some work, for some reason I got stuck a few time early on because the dialogues started going backwards.
Then ofc there's the classic ones where it's obvious that a line is meant for someone else than the one who's saying it, or where it should say she it says he instead.
Stuff like that is ofc nothing serious. But the weird thing where conversations are going backwards are a bit annoying since it's making it a bit tough to go on. But as said, I'm dropping a follow for this game and I'm looking forward to the upcoming updates.
Thanks for playing. Can you be a bit more specific about where you faced these issues? Specially the one about dialogue going backwards? That would be a great help.
I think it happened me three times, unfortunate I only remember one. The first time I met Ally at the bar
Thanks. I will try to find what the issue is, and hopefully fix it before the next update.
liked it a lot cant wait for more updates
Nice game so far, it looks clean. Kira is a little scary.
nice game guys...abby is awesome <3
All paths seem well thought out so far. Good writing.
Thanks!